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by TrespasserGuy
Fri Mar 01, 2024 7:29 pm
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Topic: Kojima: A Thriller
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Stream The stream twisted and turned. At first the terrain around it was flat and muddy. But soon, rocky outcrops formed the river’s edges. Reyes stopped. The tracks had disappeared. He looked around the area. Reyes noticed that he was getting closer to the island’s center. Near to where the steep ...
by TrespasserGuy
Thu Feb 29, 2024 10:27 pm
Forum: Other
Topic: Kojima: A Thriller
Replies: 28
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I see the Crichton style here. Love it. Tho, it should probably say: Christ, it was humid. That's actually meant to be a thought by Reyes. I just forgot to put it in italics when copying and pasting the text. I think you mean "enough that"? Also I'm not sure how many places speak this way...
by TrespasserGuy
Wed Feb 28, 2024 9:18 pm
Forum: Other
Topic: RETURN TO THE LOST WORLD
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Views: 250

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Nice chapter Drac. I feel like you've gotten the characters and their personalities pretty accurate. I like the setup with all the equipment, plus some callbacks.
by TrespasserGuy
Wed Feb 28, 2024 9:04 pm
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Topic: Kojima: A Thriller
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Part II: Yūreishima Ghost Town Christ, it’s humid. And it wasn’t even midday. Even under the cover of the trees, the heat was intense, and the air thick. The navy t-shirt clung to his skin. Reyes continued forging a path through the dense jungle. All around was a chorus of wildlife. Exotic birds, i...
by TrespasserGuy
Tue Feb 27, 2024 10:00 pm
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Topic: Kojima: A Thriller
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Thanks again Drac. I do too feel that the sequence of events seems pretty rushed. I guess it’s due to the fact I’m only writing for one main character at this point. By the time I’m finished writing I want to have at least 60k words, which is about the bare minimum length of a novel nowadays. I’d li...
by TrespasserGuy
Mon Feb 26, 2024 10:51 pm
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Topic: Kojima: A Thriller
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Journey Early the next morning. The middle-aged Okinawan man put his Suzuki SUV into drive, and began hauling the empty trailer back to its lot. In the side mirror he saw the little boat inch backwards from the launch ramp. He could barely make out the silhouette of the foreigner at the helm. Event...
by TrespasserGuy
Sat Feb 24, 2024 8:14 pm
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Topic: Kojima: A Thriller
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Akiko He drove to the beach where the body had been found. It was a modest beach, closed off at one end by a wall of verdant rock, and by a concrete pier on the other. A man was sitting on the pier casting out his fishing pole. Nothing seemed out of the ordinary. Something did catch Reyes' eye, how...
by TrespasserGuy
Fri Feb 23, 2024 8:55 pm
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Topic: RETURN TO THE LOST WORLD
Replies: 8
Views: 250

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I like the premise, although if I remember from the original novel that all the dinos on Sorna were doomed to go extinct. I wonder how you'll follow up with that premise. I also wonder if you'll include some of the characters from the first JP novel that never made it to the sequel...
by TrespasserGuy
Fri Feb 23, 2024 8:52 pm
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Topic: Kojima: A Thriller
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Drac is in the middle of reading. That, and stream trains. Hmmm stream trains... heheh. ...Great chapter. Still enjoying the technical details. Didn't expect the chickenosaurus element. Now as the reader I am wondering if that's what it is or not. Also, the spam thing was mentioned in Micro, wonder...
by TrespasserGuy
Fri Feb 23, 2024 2:50 am
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Topic: Kojima: A Thriller
Replies: 28
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Okinawa Naval Hospital He had to find a good place to change. After driving around Reyes found a public restroom in a secluded part of the city. He walked into the men’s room with the backpack slung over his shoulder, and locked himself in a stall. He stuffed his regular clothes and his shoes into ...
by TrespasserGuy
Sun Feb 18, 2024 9:40 pm
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Topic: Kojima: A Thriller
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Naha Okinawa is Japan’s southernmost and westernmost prefecture. Its island lies along the tailend of the Japanese archipelago as part of the Ryukyu Island chain. Because of its location in the East China Sea, Okinawa and its neighboring islands enjoy a subtropical climate, which makes it an ideal ...
by TrespasserGuy
Sat Feb 17, 2024 6:56 pm
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Topic: Kojima: A Thriller
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Interesting read, T.I. Intriguing enough that I will definitely read the next installment. ;) It never ceases to amaze me as to just how many people dabble in writing around here. Thank you, Rebel. I always welcome feedback from you :) I guess we're just a community of very creative people. :god: S...
by TrespasserGuy
Fri Feb 16, 2024 11:50 pm
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Topic: Kojima: A Thriller
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Shing Johnson and Simmons had put the body back in storage. They felt like they had dug a deeper hole, and had even more questions than before. “What the hell?” Simmons exclaimed, slapping the front of his thighs in frustration. “Did she even know what she was talking about?” Johnson shook his head...
by TrespasserGuy
Thu Feb 15, 2024 10:38 pm
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Topic: Kojima: A Thriller
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Wow hmm. Are you attempting to emulate Crichton in this writing? I myself have been trying this recently, with I feel some general success. However reading your chapter here, I immediately notice you've gone to the trouble of implanting knowledge-material about science and whatnot, as Crichton does...
by TrespasserGuy
Tue Feb 13, 2024 11:50 pm
Forum: Other
Topic: Kojima: A Thriller
Replies: 28
Views: 932

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I am glad you guys like it so far. TI you are right in picking up on the Japanese vibe to the whole setting. Yes, I did have the Japanese style of high schools in mind when writing that one hallucination scene. I wouldn't be fussed if there were no dinosaurs at all. Crichton's novels delve into all ...